"Students who push burgers," by Walter S. Minot.
In the literature, "Students who push burgers," Walter S. Minot argues that students who work and
attend school diminishes American education. "Yet in all lengthy analysis of what's wrong with
American education, I have not heard employment by students being blamed,"(Minot 14-16).
He believes students prioritize work for money to buy luxuries and afford socializing rather than
studying. "They work so that they could spend $60-$100.00 a week on designer jeans, rock
concerts, stereo and video systems, and, of course cars,"(Minot 31-33). His position is based
on memory and his observations as a college professor. My position is that students who work
while going to school isn't necessarily a negative. From personal experience working while
going to school, while a necessity was also an education in itself. Lessons in money and time
management, as well as, prioritizing was something that could only be learned with experience.
In opposition to Minot's argument, based on personal experience and the experiences I've observed
amongst my peers, not working while going to school is no longer a reality. 40 years ago as
mentioned by the author there were students who had the choice. In this era with many students
being single parents and heads of households with expenses not related to school, working is a must.
Lack of government funded grants, strict scholarship requirements and other educational grant
resources non-existent, it has become difficult for any student not to work.
Although money management is a very important lesson learned, so is the management of ones
time. Time management is a strong second of the lessons learned while juggling work and
studies. Setting aside time daily for studying and completing assignments creates a since of
structure, as well as, discipline, which are two very important character traits for success.
It is usually the desire to be successful which ultimately drives the student. Making the decision
to attend college with the knowledge that you also have to work is not a decision made without
giving much thought, and prioritizing ones life. Often times socializing with friends and missing
family events is where priorities become evident. Studying taking precedents over all things not
work or school related. Therefore I must counter Mr. Minot's argument that working while
attending school is a formula for the decline in American education. Once the investment is made
most responsible people who are success driven go the course.
In conclusion, working and going to school although difficult is very doable. Whether it's done
out of necessity or by choice, success can be achieved doing both. Maintaining balance financially,
managing time wisely, and prioritizing according to importance is a formula for success.
For this essay, I see some distinctive strengths. You have drawn examples from the prompt, and explained what the prompts logic was in the introduction. You presented a solid synopsis with your interpretation. Then, you had a good logic to support your reasoning why his argument was flawed. However, the main concern with this essay would be on a local development. Between clarity and minor grammatical errors, the essay could use additional work.
ReplyDeleteFor instance, when you discuss Minot’s opinion again later, and counter it, draw on a quote from his work. Then explain again what his point of view was. Afterwards, explain why he is incorrect, and what your personal experience has shown. Through using those techniques, I feel you will find yourself more successful.
Overall, good work.